As the matter of fact, she was a person who hard being convinced for instant, she certainly would likes to thinks that his opinion are the corrected then any one else view.
1. Article use:
Only use the definite article (“the”) when referring to specific items; for singular, non-specific items use “a”.
2. Word confusion:
Although they sound similar, don’t confuse “instant” with “instance”. The meanings are quite different.
3. Passive form:
While “hard being convinced” seems to be a passive construction, the form is incorrect. The word “hard” needs to be introduced by “was” and followed by an infinitive (“was hard to convince”).
4. Verb form:
After a modal verb, use the base form of the verb (“like” not “likes”).
5. Infinitive:
The infinitive is formed from “to” + the base form of the verb. There is no “s” or any other verb ending on an infinitive, so use “to think” not “to thinks”.
6. Pronoun agreement:
It makes more sense if you change “his” to “her”. “His” is possible here, but it doesn't make as much sense.
7. Word form:
The word “corrected” is a past participial adjective. Here, however, a comparison is needed (i.e., something like “more correct”). A good solution would be to change this expression to “better”.
8. Word confusion:
The words “then” and “than” sound very similar, but they are quite different. Here, we need “than” because there is an implicit comparison.
9. Possessive:
In this case, the “view” belongs to someone (i.e., “anyone else”), so it needs to be possessive (“anyone else’s”).
10. Punctuation:
The first independent clause ends with “convince”, so a semicolon is needed here.
11. Wordiness:
It is clear that the pronoun “she” refers to a person, so restating the fact is unnecessary. Instead of “she is a person who is”, we can simply say “she is”.
Suggested solution:
As a matter of fact, she is hard to convince; for instance, she certainly likes to think that her opinion is better than anyone else’s.
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