Learning to combine ideas into more complex sentences is an
important skill in writing. There are many ways to do this--many possible bonus
points! Try to combine the following three sentences.
1. Many people celebrated Pancake Day by cooking pancakes at
home .
2. Other people went to restaurants some of which offered
“all you can eat” pancakes that day.
3. Pancake Day is more properly known as Shrove Tuesday, the
day before Lent, which is when Christians start the Lenten fast.
18 comments:
Pancake Day is properly known as Shrove Tuesday, the day before Lent, which is when Christians start the Lenten fast; therefore, many people celebrated Pancake Day by cooking pancakes at home while other people went to restaurants, some of which offered "all you can eat" pancakes.
Many people celebrated Pancake Day by cooking pancakes at home; other people went to restaurants, some of which offered “all you can eat” pancakes that day, but Pancake Day is more properly known as Shrove Tuesday, the day before Lent, which is when Christians start the Lenten fast.
Many Christians celebrate the day before the Lenten fast, known as Strove Tuesday or Pancake Day, by cooking pancakes at home or going to restaurants, some of which office “all you can eat” pancakes for the day.
Pancake Day is more properly known as
Shove Tuesday, the day before Lent
which is when Christians start the Lenten fast, and many people celebrated Pancake Day by cooking pancakes at home,while other people
went to restaurants;some of which offered "all you can eat" pancakes all day.
Pancake Day, more properly is known as Shrove Tuesday which is the day before Lent, and after Christians start on the Lenten fast. Many people celebrate and cooking Pancake at home and some other people went to “All you can eat” restaurant which is offered pancakes that day.
ALESHA:A good solution:-)
ALYCIA: That's a good way of doing it:-)
MARY ANN:Almost--you've gone one word that's wrong--can you fix the problem?
BEATRICE: You need a to fix a few things here: spelling, punctuation, and verb tense consistency;-)
JIA YI: You need to rewrite this as just ONE sentence;-)
Known as Pancake Day or Shrove Tuesday, many Christians celebrate the day before the Lenten fast by cooking pancakes at home or going to restaurants where some offer “all you can eat” pancakes for that day.
Many people celebrated Pancake Day by cooking pancakes at home; other people went to restaurants, some of which offered "all you can eat" pancakes that day, in fact Pancake Day is more properly known as Shrove Tuesday (the day before lent), which is when Christians start the Lenten fast.
Many Christians celebrate Pancake Day, (more properly known as Shrove Tuesday, which is when they start the Lenten fast that occurs the day before Lent), by cooking pancakes at home, while others went to restaurants, some of which offered “all you can eat” pancakes that day.
SARAH: good sentence:-)
SERENA:Almost--can you fix the punctuation?
LISA: yes, but you need to fix the problem with the change in verb tense part way through;-)
Pancake Day, or known as Shrove Tuesday, is the day before Christians start the Lenten fast. Many people celebrate the day with homemade pancakes, or attending a restaurant for an “all you can eat” pancake special.
LESLIE: Yes, but the objective is to write this as just ONE sentence;-)
correction:
Many Christians celebrate the day before the Lenten fast, known as Strove Tuesday or Pancake Day, by cooking pancakes at home or going to restaurants, some of which offers “all you can eat” pancakes for the day.
Pancake Day, also known as Shrove Tuesday, is the day before Christians start the Lenten fast, when many people celebrate the day with homemade pancakes, or attending a restaurant for an 'all you can eat' pancake special.
Many people celebrate Shrove Tuesday, which is popularly known as Pancake Day, by cooking pancakes at home but others observe this event, that occurs the day before the Christian festival, Lent, by going to restaurants where "all-you-can-eat" pancakes are served on that day.
correction of the correct:
Many Christians celebrate the day before the Lenten fast, known as Strove Tuesday or Pancake Day, by cooking pancakes at home or going to restaurants, some of which offer “all you can eat” pancakes for the day.
Pancake Day, more properly is known as Shrove Tuesday which is the day before Lent, and after Christians start on the Lenten fast; as the result, many people celebrate and cooking Pancake at home and some other people went to “All you can eat” restaurant which is offered pancakes that day.
MARY ANN: the correction is good:-)
LESLIE:Almost--you need to check the punctuation;-)
VIVIEN: Almost--you are missing a comma; can you find it?
JIA YI: You have a problem with understanding the relationship between the ideas--think carefully about the order of events;-)
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