Learning to combine ideas into more complex sentences is
an important skill in writing. There are many ways to do this--many possible
bonus points! Try to combine the following three sentences.Sentence 1: Easter is a four-day weekend for most of us.
Sentence 2: Many people eat too much chocolate over this holiday period.
Sentence 3: Many of the symbols associated with Easter come from ancient spring-time celebrations.
18 comments:
As Easter is a four-day weekend for most of us,many people eat too much chocolate over this holiday period;
in addition, many other symbols associated with Easter come from ancient spring-time celebrations.
Many symbols associated with Easter come from ancient spring-time celebrations resulting in many people eating too much chocolate over the four-day Easter weekend.
Easter is a four-day weekend for most of us that is associated with symbols from ancient spring-time celebrations, and eating too much chocolate.
BEATRICE: Nicely done!
MARY ANN:You need to rethink the connection between ancient symbols and eating too much chocolate--it's non-sequitur;-)
LESLIE:Yes, but check the punctuation;-)
Easter is a four-day weekend, for most of us, that is associated with symbols from ancient spring-time celebrations, and eating too much chocolate.
There were too many people at the mall, so I shopped too quickly and now I have to return the small shirts
For many, Easter is a four day weekend dedicated to eating lots of chocolate, often in the shapes of eggs or bunnies; which are indeed, symbols from ancient spring-time celebrations.
Despite many of its symbols associated with ancient spring-time celebrations, Easter is a four-day weekend for most of us and usually entails eating too much chocolate.
Many people eat too much chocolate over the four-day Easter weekend; moreover, many symbols associated with Easter come from ancient spring-time celebrations.
Easter is a four-day weekend filled with many symbols from ancient sprint-time celebrations, and is a holiday in which many people eat too much chocolate.
The symbols associated with Easter comes from ancient Spring-time celebration and many of us eat too much chocolate over the four-day, Easter weekend.
LESLIE: There's a comma you need to get rid of;-)
MARY ANN: better, but there is a punctuation error--or you need to add a subject to a clause;-)
ASHLEIGH: Almost--check the punctuation;-)
SARAH:A good answer:-)
LEIGHA: Almost--that "moreover" transition isn't working well for you;-)
VIVIEN: You need to think about the punctuation and the link/relationship between the two parts of the sentence.
Easter is a four-day weekend filled with many symbols from ancient sprint-time celebrations, and it is a holiday in which many people eat too much chocolate.
Many people eat chocolate over Easter, the four-day weekend holiday, and many of the symbols associated with it are from ancient spring-time celebrations.
MARY ANN: that's it:-)
STEPHANIE: A good sentence!
Many of the symbols associated with Easter come from ancient spring-time celebrations; for most of us, Easter is a four-day weekend, over this holiday period, many people eat too much chocolate.
Easter is a four-day weekend, for most of us, that is associated with symbols from ancient spring-time celebrations and eating too much chocolate.
SERENA:Almost--can you fix the punctuation?
LESLIE: That's better!
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