Learning to combine ideas into more complex sentences is an
important skill in writing. There are many ways to do this--many possible bonus
points! Try to combine the following three sentences.
Sentence 1: People have survived both Christmas and the New
Year celebrations.
Sentence 2: Many people probably ate far too much food and
are now trying to lose weight.
Sentence 3: Good times with friends and families often
involve eating too much food.
16 comments:
People have survived the Christmas and New Year celebrations these holidays resulted in most people eat too much food as they enjoyed good times with family and friends, as a result of this they are probably trying to lose weight.
ALESHA: There are 2 things to consider here--a word form error and punctuation;-)
People have survived both Christmas and New Year celebrations, these holidays resulted in most people eat too much food as they enjoyed good times with family and friends, and as a result of this many people are probably trying to lose weight.
People have survived the Christmas and New Year's celebrations, which probably involved eating far too much food and they are now trying to lose weight; however, good times with friends and family often involve eating too much food.
ALESHA:Punctuation is still a problem:-(
SARAH: Can you find the missing comma?
People have survived both Christmas and New Year celebrations; however, many people probably ate far too much
food and are now trying to lose weight, as good times with friends and families often involve eating too
much.
People have survived the Christmas and New Year's celebrations, which probably involved eating far too much food, and they are now trying to lose weight; however, good times with friends and family often involve eating too much food.
BEATRICE:All correct except for one little comma--can you correct it?
SARAH: Great!
It is common that good times with friends and families often involve eating too much food, with many people probably eating far too much food and are now trying to lose weight and it is sometimes a miracle that people survive both Christmas and the New Year celebrations.
People have survived both Christmas and New Year celebrations; however,
many people probably ate far too much
food and are now trying to lose weight as good times with friends and families often involve eating too much.
I have revised the sentence without the second comma.
JACOB: That's a good start. Now check for a word that should be omitted and the punctuation;-)
BEATRICE:Thank you:-)
The good times had with friends and families in both Christmas and New Years celebrations often involve eating too much food and, as a result, many people are now trying to lose weight.
People have survived both Christmas and the New Year celebrations; however, many people probably ate far too much food while enjoying good times with friends and families and are now trying to lose weight.
Good times with friends and families often involve eating too much food,
One of the challenges of surviving Christmas and New Year celebrations
One of the setbacks of Christmas and New Year celebrations is that
many people probably ate far too much food and are now trying to lose weight; after all, good times with friends and families often involve eating too much food.
One of the setbacks of Christmas and New Year celebrations is that
many people probably ate far too much food and are now trying to lose weight; after all, good times with friends and families often involve eating too much food.
STEPHANIE:well done!
JANIE:Great sentence:-)
JENNIFER:Excellent!
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