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Thursday, April 4, 2013
GRAMMAR QUESTION, April 4th, 2013
Correct the sentence below. There are many errors and many possible correct solutions--lots of bonus points for everyone!
Driving to
the mall last week my car was near disappearing in a pothole: deciding to call
the cities administration reporting the problem, I was hoping the problem was
to be fixed quickly however its still their and its to be avoided.
27 comments:
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Robert said
While driving to the mall last week my car nearly disappearing into a pothole: I decided to call the cities administration to report the problem, I was hoping the problem would be fixed quickly. However its still there and hard to avoid.
Although I reported the pothole to city administration after my car almost disappeared in it during the drive to the mall last week, the pothole is still there so avoid it.
Driving to the mall last week, my car nearly disappeared into a pothole; therefore, I decided to call the city’s administration to report the problem with the hope of a quick resolution. However, the pothole is still there and needs to be avoided.
While I was driving to the mall last week; my car nearly disappeared into a pothole. I decided to call the city's administration to report the problem. I was hoping the problem would be fixed quickly. It is still there; therefore, I will avoid it.
My car almost disappeared in a pot hole last week, while driving to the mall. I called the city administration department and hoped that the problem would be fixed quickly; however, it hasn’t been and the hole should be avoided.
While driving to the mall last week, my car almost disappeared into a large pothole. I did call the City’s administration department and informed them of the dangerous hole; consequently, I expected it to be repaired. Unfortunately, it hasn’t been and that stretch of road should be avoided.
While driving to the mall last week, my car almost disappeared into a large pothole. I did call the City’s administration department and informed them of the dangerous hole; consequently, I expected it to be repaired. Unfortunately, the pothole still hasn't been filled in and that stretch of road should be avoided.
My car nearly disappeared in a pothole when I drove to the mall last week. I decided to call the city's administration to report the problem,and I hoped it would be fixed quickly; however, it still remains and should be avoided.
While driving to the mall last week, my car nearly disappeared into a pothole. I contacted the city administration to report the problem, hoping it could be fixed quickly. However the pothole is still there and should be avoided.
ROBERT: A good start, but there are a few things to think about: verb form, punctuation, plural/possessive;-) ALSO PLEASE GIVE ME THE FIRST LETTER OF YOUR LAST NAME--THERE ARE SEVERAL "ROBERTS" IN THE COURSE. MARY ANN:An excellent solution:-) LESLIE:Another good solution:-) JOCELYN:Almost--check the punctuation;-) JEANNE:Close--can you fix a punctuation error? ALYCIA: Well done! JAMES: nearly there--you have an ambiguous referent, and a punctuation error;-)
While driving to the mall last week my car nearly disappeared into a pothole, and I decided to call the cities administration reporting the problem; I was hoping the problem was going to be fixed quickly, however it is still there so make sure you avoid it.
While driving to the mall last week, my car nearly disappeared in a pothole. I decided to call the City’s administration to report the problem. I had hoped the problem was going to be fixed quickly; however, it is still there and should be avoided.
Hi Veronica, Is the error in all 3 of my comments? Below is the correction for my first comment. Is this what you were referring to?
My car almost disappeared in a pot hole last week while driving to the mall. I called the city administration department and hoped that the problem would be fixed quickly; however, it hasn’t been and the hole should be avoided
My car nearly disappeared into a pothole on my way to the mall last week; having reported this to the cities administration I assumed the problem would be fixed quickly; however, it is still there, and should be avoided.
While I was driving to the mall last week, my car nearly disappeared into a pothole; consequently, I decided to call the cities administration to report the problem. I had hoped the problem would be fixed quickly; however, the pothole is still there, and must be avoided.
GRACE: You're on the right track. Now think about the difference between plural and possessive nouns,and also check gerund usage and punctuation;-) JENNIFER B: Very close--check capitalization;-) JEANNE:I was referring to the 'correction'--I assumed that's the one you wanted me to look at. ASHLEIGH:Getting there--think about the difference between plurals and possessives, and check the punctuation;-) SERENA: Also close--think about the difference between plurals and possessives, and check the punctuation;-)
My car nearly disappeared into a porthole while driving to the mall last week so I called the city administration and reproted the problem but it was not fixed quickly therefore the hole is still there and must be avoided
While driving to the mall last week, my car almost disappeared into a large pothole. I did call the City’s administration department and informed them of the dangerous hole; consequently, I expected it to be repaired. Unfortunately, the pothole still hasn't been filled in, and that stretch of road should be avoided.
While I was driving to the mall last week, my car almost disappeared in a pothole; therefore I called the city`s administration to report the problem, hoping the problem would be fixed quickly. However, the pothole is still there and needs to be avoided.
While driving to the mall last week, my car nearly sank in a pothole. I contacted the city's administration to report the problem and assumed they would make it a priority; however, it is still there and should be avoided.
While I was driving to the mall last week, my car nearly disappeared into a pothole. I decided to call the city's administration to report the problem. I was hoping the problem would be fixed quickly. It is still there; therefore, I will avoid it.
Hmmmm... I wrote a response and it said it was posted but I came back and its gone.... weird... well I hope its not too late now.
While driving to the mall last week my car nearly disappeared into a pothole, and I decided to call the city's administration reporting the problem. I had hoped the problem would be fixed quickly; however, it is still there so make sure you avoid it.
Re-posted with the corrected word and punctuation.
My car nearly disappeared into a pothole while driving to the mall last week; so I called the city administration and reproted the problem but it was not fixed quickly, therefore, the hole is still there and must be avoided.
Even though I reported the pothole to the city administration last week when a trip to the mall nearly swallowed my car, it is still there so be sure to avoid it.
27 comments:
Robert said
While driving to the mall last week my car nearly disappearing into a pothole: I decided to call the cities administration to report the problem, I was hoping the problem would be fixed quickly. However its still there and hard to avoid.
Although I reported the pothole to city administration after my car almost disappeared in it during the drive to the mall last week, the pothole is still there so avoid it.
Driving to the mall last week, my car nearly disappeared into a pothole; therefore, I decided to call the city’s administration to report the problem with the hope of a quick resolution. However, the pothole is still there and needs to be avoided.
While I was driving to the mall last week; my car nearly disappeared into a pothole. I decided to call the city's administration to report the problem. I was hoping the problem would be fixed quickly. It is still there; therefore, I will avoid it.
My car almost disappeared in a pot hole last week, while driving to the mall. I called the city administration department and hoped that the problem would be fixed quickly; however, it hasn’t been and the hole should be avoided.
While driving to the mall last week, my car almost disappeared into a large pothole. I did call the City’s administration department and informed them of the dangerous hole; consequently, I expected it to be repaired. Unfortunately, it hasn’t been and that stretch of road should be avoided.
Re-posted with a correction.
While driving to the mall last week, my car almost disappeared into a large pothole. I did call the City’s administration department and informed them of the dangerous hole; consequently, I expected it to be repaired. Unfortunately, the pothole still hasn't been filled in and that stretch of road should be avoided.
My car nearly disappeared in a pothole when I drove to the mall last week. I decided to call the city's administration to report the problem,and I hoped it would be fixed quickly; however, it still remains and should be avoided.
While driving to the mall last week, my car nearly disappeared into a pothole. I contacted the city administration to report the problem, hoping it could be fixed quickly. However the pothole is still there and should be avoided.
ROBERT: A good start, but there are a few things to think about: verb form, punctuation, plural/possessive;-) ALSO PLEASE GIVE ME THE FIRST LETTER OF YOUR LAST NAME--THERE ARE SEVERAL "ROBERTS" IN THE COURSE.
MARY ANN:An excellent solution:-)
LESLIE:Another good solution:-)
JOCELYN:Almost--check the punctuation;-)
JEANNE:Close--can you fix a punctuation error?
ALYCIA: Well done!
JAMES: nearly there--you have an ambiguous referent, and a punctuation error;-)
While driving to the mall last week my car nearly disappeared into a pothole, and I decided to call the cities administration reporting the problem; I was hoping the problem was going to be fixed quickly, however it is still there so make sure you avoid it.
While driving to the mall last week, my car nearly disappeared in a pothole. I decided to call the City’s administration to report the problem. I had hoped the problem was going to be fixed quickly; however, it is still there and should be avoided.
Hi Veronica,
Is the error in all 3 of my comments? Below is the correction for my first comment. Is this what you were referring to?
My car almost disappeared in a pot hole last week while driving to the mall. I called the city administration department and hoped that the problem would be fixed quickly; however, it hasn’t been and the hole should be avoided
My car nearly disappeared into a pothole on my way to the mall last week; having reported this to the cities administration I assumed the problem would be fixed quickly; however, it is still there, and should be avoided.
While I was driving to the mall last week, my car nearly disappeared into a pothole; consequently, I decided to call the cities administration to report the problem. I had hoped the problem would be fixed quickly; however, the pothole is still there, and must be avoided.
GRACE: You're on the right track. Now think about the difference between plural and possessive nouns,and also check gerund usage and punctuation;-)
JENNIFER B: Very close--check capitalization;-)
JEANNE:I was referring to the 'correction'--I assumed that's the one you wanted me to look at.
ASHLEIGH:Getting there--think about the difference between plurals and possessives, and check the punctuation;-)
SERENA: Also close--think about the difference between plurals and possessives, and check the punctuation;-)
My car nearly disappeared into a porthole while driving to the mall last week so I called the city administration and reproted the problem but it was not fixed quickly therefore the hole is still there and must be avoided
Re-posted with punctuation added.
While driving to the mall last week, my car almost disappeared into a large pothole. I did call the City’s administration department and informed them of the dangerous hole; consequently, I expected it to be repaired. Unfortunately, the pothole still hasn't been filled in, and that stretch of road should be avoided.
VIVIEN:Getting there--you need some punctuation it the sentence, and check the one word you have mistaken for another;-)
JEANNE:Thank you!
While I was driving to the mall last week, my car almost disappeared in a pothole; therefore I called the city`s administration to report the problem, hoping the problem would be fixed quickly. However, the pothole is still there and needs to be avoided.
While driving to the mall last week, my car nearly sank in a pothole. I contacted the city's administration to report the problem and assumed they would make it a priority; however, it is still there and should be avoided.
SHADE: A good solution:-)
ASHLEIGH: An excellent variation:-)
While I was driving to the mall last week, my car nearly disappeared into a pothole. I decided to call the city's administration to report the problem. I was hoping the problem would be fixed quickly. It is still there; therefore, I will avoid it.
JOCELYN: A good answer:-)
Hmmmm... I wrote a response and it said it was posted but I came back and its gone.... weird... well I hope its not too late now.
While driving to the mall last week my car nearly disappeared into a pothole, and I decided to call the city's administration reporting the problem. I had hoped the problem would be fixed quickly; however, it is still there so make sure you avoid it.
Re-posted with the corrected word and punctuation.
My car nearly disappeared into a pothole while driving to the mall last week; so I called the city administration and reproted the problem but it was not fixed quickly, therefore, the hole is still there and must be avoided.
Even though I reported the pothole to the city administration last week when a trip to the mall nearly swallowed my car, it is still there so be sure to avoid it.
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