Learning to combine ideas into more complex sentences is an
important skill in writing. There are many ways to do this--many possible bonus
points! Try to combine the following three sentences.
Sentence 1: We are at the beginning of a new year.
Sentence 2: The weather is wintery, but we hope it is almost
half over.
Sentence 3: Some of us are thinking ahead to what the new
year will bring and that includes warmer
weather.
17 comments:
At the beginning of a new year, the weather is wintery, but there’s hope that it is half over; furthermore, some people are thinking ahead to what this year will bring, which will include warmer weather.
We are at the beginning of a new year
and some of us are thinking ahead to what the new year will bring and that
includes warmer weather; however,the weather is wintery,but we hope it is
almost half over.
At the beginning of a new year, some think ahead to what the year will bring, which includes warmer weather, a contrast to the current wintery weather.
We are at the beginning of a new year and the weather is wintery, some of us are thinking ahead to what this year will bring, which includes warmer weather; however, we hope the winter weather is half over.
SARAH:Nicely done:-)
BEATRICE:A good version!
GRACE:Almost--check the punctuation;-)
ALESHA:Nearly there--can you fix the punctuation?
We hope the wintery weather is half over, now at the beginning of this new year; meanwhile, we are looking ahead to what this year will bring, including warmer weather.
We are at the beginning of a new year and the weather is wintery some of us are thinking ahead to what this year will bring, which includes warmer weather; however, we hope the winter weather is half over.
JUSTINE:That first clause is awkward and ambiguous--is a storm half over?
ALESHA:Sorry--the punctuation problems remain:-(
We are at the beginning of a new year, and the weather is wintery, some of us are thinking ahead to what this year will bring, which includes warmer weather; however, we hope the winter weather is half over.
We are at the beginning of a new year, the weather is wintery,but we hope it is almost half over; some of us are thinking ahead to what the new year will bring, and that includes warmer weather.
At the beginning of a new year, some think ahead to what the year will bring, which includes warmer weather; a contrast to the current wintery weather.
ALESHA:There's still one problem area;-)
SERENA:Almost--there's a little punctuation error:-)
GRACE: Sorry--a problem remains;-)
We are at the beginning of a new year and the weather is wintery, some of us are thinking ahead to what this year will bring, which includes warmer weather; however, we hope the winter weather is half over.
At the beginning of a new year, some think ahead to what the year will bring; this includes warmer weather, a contrast to the current wintery weather.
ALESHA:You need a better understanding of where to use commas and semicolons--check the textbook, or use the PET materials on the AU Write Site.
GRACE:yes, but you have substantially changed the original;-)
At the beginning of a new year, the weather is wintry, but many hope that it is half over; in addition, some are thinking ahead to what the year will bring, which includes warmer weather.
In the beginning of the new year, when winter is almost half over, we look ahead to warmer weather.
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