Learning to combine ideas into more complex sentences is an
important skill in writing. There are many ways to do this--many possible bonus
points! Combine the following three sentences.
Sentence 1: The snowfall lay heavily on the ground.
Sentence 2: People were shovelling driveways and
sidewalks and piling up snow into snow mountains.
Sentence 3: There was little traffic on the roads
until the snow ploughs had cleared the major routes.
22 comments:
The snowfall lay heavily on the ground, so people were out shoveling their driveways and sidewalks and piling the snow into high mountains; also there was little traffic on the roads, as people were waiting for the snow ploughs to clear the major routes.
People were shovelling driveways and sidewalks and piling up snow into snow mountains, because the snow lay heavily on the ground, because of this, there was little traffic on the roads until the snow ploughs had cleared the major routes.
The snow lay heavily on the ground as people were out shoveling driveways and sidewalks, and piling the snow into snow mountains; consequently, there was little traffic on the roads until the snowploughs had cleared the major routes.
GRACE:A good solution:-)
ALYCIA:Almost--can you fix the punctuation?
SARAH: Nicely done:-)
People were out shovelling driveways and sidewalks, piling snow up into mountains, in an effort to clear the snowfall that lay heavily on the ground; consequently, there was little traffic on the roads until the snow ploughs were able to clear the major routes.
People were shovelling driveways and sidewalks and piling up snow into snow mountains because the snowfall lay heavily on the ground and because there was little traffic on the roads until the snowploughs had cleared the major routes.
The snowfall lay heavily on the ground as people were shovelling
driveways and sidewalks piling snow
up into mountains however; there was
little traffic on the roads until the
snow ploughs had cleared the major routes.
People were shoveling driveways and sidewalks, and piling up snow into snow mountains, because the snow lay heavily on the ground, because of this, there was little traffic on the roads until the snow ploughs had cleared the major routes.
As there was heavy snowfall on the ground little traffic traversed the roads until the snow ploughs had cleared the major routes. While the snowplows did their work, many people shoveled their driveways and sidewalks and piled the snow into snow mountains.
BRITTANY: An excellent solution:-)
MARY ANNE:Well done!
BEATRICE:Now can you fix the punctuation?
ALYCIA:the punctuation is still a problem, and stylistically, you should change one "because".
NADINE:Almost--there's a punctuation error. Can you find it?
People were shoveling driveways, sidewalks and piling up snow into snow mountains, because the snow lay heavily on the ground, due to this, there was little traffic on the roads until the snow ploughs had cleared the major routes.
People were shovelling driveway and sidewalks and piling up snow into snow mountains since the snowfall lay heavily on the ground; even the traffic seem to wait for the snow ploughs to clear major routes.
The snowfall lay heavily on the ground, so people were out shovelling their driveways and sidewalks and piling the snow into snow mountains; their was also very little traffic on the road because people were waiting for the snow ploughs to clear the major routes.
Correction to my sentence.
The snowfall lay heavily on the ground, as people were shovelling driveways and sidewalks piling snow up into mountains, however; there was little traffic on the roads until the new ploughs had cleared the major routes.
ALYCIA: You've made another of those comma/semicolon errors; can you fix it?
L BENSCH: A good sentence:-)
ALESHA:yes--BUT, there is a bad word confusion error in there. Can you correct it?
BEATRICE: No--you need to check how to use "however."
The snowfall lay heavily on the ground, so people were out shovelling their driveways and sidewalks and piling the snow into snow mountains; there was also very little traffic on the road because people were waiting for the snow ploughs to clear the major routes.
Because of the heavy snowfall, people were shoveling driveways and piling up snow into mountains, and until the major routes had been cleared, there was little traffic on the roads.
People were shovelling driveways and sidewalks and piling up snow into snow mountains as the snowfall lay heavily on the ground; in addition there was little traffic on the roads until the snow ploughs had cleared the major routes.
People were busy shoveling driveways and sidewalks which piled snow into snow mountain which meant there was little traffic on the roads until the snow ploughs had cleared the major routes after a heavy snowfall.
ALESHA:OK!
STEPHANIE:Excellent:-)
VERONICA: Well done!
JENNIFER: Almost--you're missing a plural "s";-)
People were busy shoveling driveway's and sidewalks which piled snow into snow mountain which meant there was little traffic on the roads until the snow ploughs had cleared the major routes after a heavy snowfall.
JENNIFER: Sorry--that's a apostrophe "s" not a plural;-)
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